Need some feedback on new tour
 

Hi everyone

I've been working on a new tour and would appreciate some valuable feedback |waves|

Thanks

http://www.18closeup.com/design/tour09/newtour.jpg

Overall that tour looks damn good in my opinion. Here are some slight, perhaps anal, suggestions.

Header is great and catches my attention. However girl on left isn't very attractive imo. Other 3 are very fine.

How many surfers know what bitrate means? I might change it to 'transfer rates up to 8000 kbps'

'Updates twice a week or more' to 'Multiple updates each and every week'

Under site stats, what does 'bonus videos' actually mean? There's got to be a better way to state whatever it is. 'Number of models' change to 'Number of beautiful teen girls'. Change 'Site size' to 'Downloadable Content'.

Grammar check the text under 'Welcome to 18CloseUp'

Under Claire's entry, the first 4 small thumbnails are the same. OMG spell and grammar check her text entry as well.

Is it me or does it look like all that pussy is jumping off the screen. I was over here dodging squirt juice...lol

Looks good besides the couple of grammar errors that howlingwulf mentioned.

thanks HowlingWolf, appreciated :)
I changed the girl on left as you suggested.
removed transfer rates and changed "bonus videos" for "DVD quality videos"
grammar errors checked as far as I can tell
I didn't put 'Number of beautiful teen girls' because it's too subjective and some surfers wouldn't agree after checking the base
the first 4 small thumbnails in claire's video are just temporary (there will be 4 extreme closeups there) as for the text there

http://www.18closeup.com/design/tour09/newtour-2.jpg

Any other ideas, anyone?

looks good, the surfer will like it :-)

I just uploaded the new tour... Can anyone check it out and see if there's no major bug?


http://www.18closeup.com/main.htm

I've checked it with IE7 and FF3.5

There are only 2 flash teasers working at the moment: cindy on main page (bottom) and claire on tour page 1 (bottom). The iPhone Teaser hasn't been uploaded too.

Any help is much appreciated

Thanks

Seems fine. Will this replace the current tour or be an alternate? Site seems a little slow today though.

It depends of course of how it converts compared to the previous tour but yes, it's there to replace the old one.
About the site speed, yes, I'm working on it. I still have to figure out if it's related to the line capacity, processor speed or available memory... |huh

Now I have to go change all the pages I made to match and promote your site. :(

Sorry to hear that :(
Let me know if you need anything...

I noticed the slowness too...also the recips on the links page look off center, like a table that is right justified instead of centered.

Looks good though, I like the pussy-in-your-face effect.

thx for the feedback, LD.
Was it slow for downloading the teaser, for embedded flash vids, for loading pages or all the above? What was your d/l speed?

Ok, I doubled the line speed (>50Mb/s). It looks ok now...