That's good advice, thanks dude.
I usually keep the text down to a bare minimum - few paragraphs or just linked lines. I think I was trying something new there...either that or, based on the story, I was revealing a part of myself I have yet to waken up to!
Right, back to work. I'm addicted to this forum already - wanna know what comes after "Rock stars...is there anything they don't know?" hehe have to post some more later.