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Originally Posted by walrus
First, thanks for putting yourself on the chopping blog err block.
Personally, I feel you over use your keywords a bit. By the time I got to the second paragraph, it seemed like I was reading something I had already read. The whole thing felt spammy.
I put a lot of stock in the readability of a post. Words and pictures combining to create a mental fantasy for the reader. Truth is I've let myself get so out of practice with this that I probably only am able to do it satisfactorily on rare occasions and usually I don't take enough time to force myself to do it properly
I've always wondered why you felt Colorado was such a valid keyword. You must be really targeting all the perverts there as you used that specific keyword 9 times.
Talk about readability problems, I've been all over the place so far.
Anyway, here is how I would improve on your post.
Since I write a bit more in the text area I'll leave a link to one of my posts so that you can feel free to rip it apart. Just take note now that I do realize I overuse the word fuck / fucking way to much.
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Walrus,
Thanks for the feedback
I just woke up and re-reading my first post, I'll agree that Colorado was/is a bit spammy. I do get a lot of local traffic on that particular splog and not every post makes mention of Colorado.
Phrases like Colorado girls, Colorado porn, sexy Colorado girls, etc. send me a lot of traffic. I just checked my stats and I got three sales form that splog so far this month with 2 of the three being to Colorado residents.
I'll make another stab at it after a cup of coffee and something to eat.