thanks HowlingWolf, appreciated
I changed the girl on left as you suggested.
removed transfer rates and changed "bonus videos" for "DVD quality videos"
grammar errors checked as far as I can tell
I didn't put 'Number of beautiful teen girls' because it's too subjective and some surfers wouldn't agree after checking the base
the first 4 small thumbnails in claire's video are just temporary (there will be 4 extreme closeups there) as for the text there
Any other ideas, anyone?