Please Critique My First Freesite

[dragonfly08]

Hello Everyone. Happy 4th of July. I have created my first freesite. Any constructive criticism is appreciated:

http://www.she-loves-porn.com/asian/asian070704/

-Dragonfly08

[annie_cash]

first of all the site must have a title, you also need a second page between the index and the 2 galleries and you have more than 4 outgoing links in the index

[Licker4U]

Originally Posted by dragonfly08

Hello Everyone. Happy 4th of July. I have created my first freesite. Any constructive criticism is appreciated:

http://www.she-loves-porn.com/asian/asian070704/

-Dragonfly08

Nice start.
What Annie said and:

You have a < title > Free Asian Porn and Cams If that's the name of your site put in on the index page. I'm not sure where the "and cams" comes into play. It's not mentioned anywhere on your site. Might want to just name it Free Asian Porn.

On your gallery pages you have banners and no text. Text sells. Put some juicy text above the banners and linked text below. Tell the surfer what you want him to do. "Click Here For The Free Tour At Beijing Beavers" "Click here for the trial, it's only......" "Join right now and start downloading in minutes" "The best asian porn is at Beijing Beavers! Click here to get it!" Something that tells your surfer to click and why he should click.

[dragonfly08]

Annie and Licker,

I think I have corrected all the errors you two pointed out. Im ready for more critique!

Thanks

[dragonfly08]

Annie,

Thanks for your input. I have put titles on all the pages, I have put a second page between the index pages and the gallery pages, and I only have 4 outgoing links on the index page.

Licker,

I have removed the 'and cams' from my title and its now just called "Free Asian Porn Pics" in both the title and at the top of my pages. I have also put text with my banners.

Thanks for the tips. If anyone has any other constructive criticisms for me, it would be much appreciated.

[annie_cash]

Originally Posted by dragonfly08

Annie,

Thanks for your input. I have put titles on all the pages, I have put a second page between the index pages and the gallery pages, and I only have 4 outgoing links on the index page.

Wow, my mistake, I meant you had more than 3 outgoing links (4 is too much for most LL).

[dragonfly08]

Annie,

No more than 3 including the banners at the top and bottom?

-Dragonfly08

[Licker4U]

Originally Posted by dragonfly08

Annie,

No more than 3 including the banners at the top and bottom?

-Dragonfly08

That's correct, if you READ the rules at link lists, most say three outgoing links maximum. Your index page has six. Otherwise it's a good start. Might want to set the size of your text so it stands out a little.

It's looking good.

[Beaver Bob]

on your pages that have only 2 outgoing links, make another, might as well use all 3. I see more than 4 on your index.

Also, this is just being picky, but I wouldnt' underline your title like that (at the top). It gives off the appearance of a link and its confusing.

[dragonfly08]

Licker,

I have updated my index page to have 3 outgoing links.

Beaver Bob,

I have updated my page to take advantage of my 3 max outgoing links.

Ready for more.

-Dragonfly08

[Licker4U]

The page is 404 right now

[dragonfly08]

Sorry bout that. I changed the directory structure:
http://www.she-loves-porn.com/niches/asian/asian070704/

[annie_cash]

Maybe its because its 3 am and Im tired but I still see 6 outgoing links in the index page

[Porn Junkie]

Originally Posted by annie_cash

Maybe its because its 3 am and Im tired but I still see 6 outgoing links in the index page

Same with the gallery pages

[Licker4U]

Originally Posted by dragonfly08

Sorry bout that. I changed the directory structure:
http://www.she-loves-porn.com/niches/asian/asian070704/

You're getting there but you still hae four sponsor links on your index page, your main page only has two links, you're allowed three so why not use them?

Instead of this: <a href="http://asiansluts.megapornmall.com/sf_tirrellp_A"><font size="4"><img border="0" src="../banners/480x80.gif" width="480" height="80"></font></a>
<p><a href="http://asiansluts.megapornmall.com/sf_tirrellp_A"><font color="#FF0000" size="4">Click
here for the trial, its only $4.95</font></a></p>

Try something like this: <a href="http://asiansluts.megapornmall.com/sf_tirrellp_A"><img border="0" src="../banners/480x80.gif" width="480" height="80"><br>
<font color="#FF0000" size="4">Click here for the trial, its only $4.95</font></a>

This will tuck the text up closer to the banners and let your size attribute work

[dragonfly08]

I dont know how I missed that on the index page... fixed now.
In addition, the text for the ads has been snuggled up against the banners. Thanks for you help.
http://www.she-loves-porn.com/niches/asian/asian070704/

[Licker4U]

Originally Posted by dragonfly08

I dont know how I missed that on the index page... fixed now.
In addition, the text for the ads has been snuggled up against the banners. Thanks for you help.
http://www.she-loves-porn.com/niches/asian/asian070704/

Your 2257 link is 404

[japamor]

dragonfly08

You need to adjust the width of your pages slightly. I get a horizontal scroll with a 800 x 600 screen. That's a refusal at many LL's.

Some of your banners are textless - you're wasting advertising space above and below your banner. Also the SE's just love text.

AS Licker4U pointed out, your Main page only has 2 ads- might as well use your full quota of 3.

I think your gallery pages in particular should have more text and less banner advertising, partly for the SE's and partly for your wallet!

In general the site is too bland. It needs jazzing up a bit to give it a bit of interest.

Don't be disheartened, its a good effort and you're very much on the right lines.

[HowlingWulf]

I personally don't like the generic 'free pics' titles and descriptions. You should describe the galleries as best you can. Something like title 'Naughty Asian Princesses' and description 'Petite asian chicks spread their sexy legs for deep penetrations'. Make it stand out from the other listings.

[gandalfuy]

i get a 404 page right now.