Make our designer Cry

SexycityBrian · 2006-02-09, 01:44 PM

Ok so our designer was making freesites that suck to we told him to spend a day reading post about how to do them right and told him to look at what others are doing and spend the entire day learning ,now here are his samples from what he learned.

http://www.collegegirllane.com/freesites/tgp/rxp134/01/
http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/
http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp/rxp1018/01/

Ok so did he pay attention if not tell him why they suck and see if you can make him cry

swedguy · 2006-02-09, 02:08 PM

I assume that theses will be used as HFS, so I will be harsh

http://www.collegegirllane.com/freesites/tgp/rxp134/01/
Index:
* Doesn't fit 800x600
* 2 ads, you can up to 3. The top one wouldn't sell water to a lost Eskimo in the middle of the Sahara desert.
* Google has enough traffic = drop the exit link

Main:
* Doesn't fit 800x600
* Title is linked
* Ads that doesn't do very much

Galleries and pics:
* Doesn't fit 800x600
* Title is linked
* The pics are HUGE. The ones I looked at were 300-450kB
* Same thing here with the ads
* Vidcaps
* I wouldn't really categorize her as a college chick

spazlabz · 2006-02-09, 02:21 PM

Great post SwedGuy

thank you

Jim

SexycityBrian · 2006-02-09, 02:26 PM

Swedguy thanks these are the things we want to know.

Brian

Preacher · 2006-02-09, 02:37 PM

http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/

I personally wouldn't underline your non-linked text. Just by looking at the page without mousing over anything I have no idea what is a link and what is just sales text.

(gallery pages) Maybe it's just me, but "More chicks inside!" is bordering on blind when it's not under a banner or paysite name.

As Swedguy said, title is linked on this site too.

Greenguy · 2006-02-11, 08:00 AM

These do look a lot better than the last ones

http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp/rxp1018/01/ -
- Your designer seems to use a lot of odd color combinations & the red text on the purple background on the warning & gallery pages is a good example
- The text in places seems a bit Roman Maroni:
"Enjoy Watching Her As She Enjoys Sucking And Pounding This Huge Cock In Her Breast While Waiting For The Cum To Explode In Her Face!!"
1 - too many enjoys
2 - is "she" really pounding the cock in her breast?
3 - the cum is going to explode "in" her face?

http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/ -
- "THIS STRIPPING SLUT IS NASTY AS HELL AND SHE WANTS YOU TO WATCH. HER TAKING OFF HER CLOTHES, SUCKING COCK, EVEN FUCKING!"
What's with the period (new sentence) after "watch"?

There's more bad grammar on the sites, but I think you get the idea. If these were submitted to me, I'd probably decline them based on the text

And, what I'd like to see are the next free sites for each...I know how your designer likes to use the same content over & over & over....

GonZo · 2006-02-11, 09:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Greenguy

These do look a lot better than the last ones

http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp/rxp1018/01/ -
- Your designer seems to use a lot of odd color combinations & the red text on the purple background on the warning & gallery pages is a good example
- The text in places seems a bit Roman Maroni:
"Enjoy Watching Her As She Enjoys Sucking And Pounding This Huge Cock In Her Breast While Waiting For The Cum To Explode In Her Face!!"
1 - too many enjoys
2 - is "she" really pounding the cock in her breast?
3 - the cum is going to explode "in" her face?

http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/ -
- "THIS STRIPPING SLUT IS NASTY AS HELL AND SHE WANTS YOU TO WATCH. HER TAKING OFF HER CLOTHES, SUCKING COCK, EVEN FUCKING!"
What's with the period (new sentence) after "watch"?

There's more bad grammar on the sites, but I think you get the idea. If these were submitted to me, I'd probably decline them based on the text

And, what I'd like to see are the next free sites for each...I know how your designer likes to use the same content over & over & over....

I think his designer spends too much time looking at some of my old free sites to choose color combinations.

spazlabz · 2006-02-11, 08:37 AM

Thank YOu Very much Preachers & GreenGuy.
I want you guys all to understand that our Gallery guy IS reading this post (and a nice long thread about freesite design that has been posted many times). Thank you very much for the feed back

Jim

Wazza · 2006-02-11, 10:13 AM

Thumbs are gigantic - the ones I checked were all 25kb+

MadMax · 2006-02-11, 11:13 AM

The first one has some really bad vidcaps in it. Vidcaps don't sell. If your primary content is movies then build sites with movie clips.

Same sales text blocks used over and over on all of them...if they didn't click the first time they aren't clicking the second time.

Why not link the banner on the main page of the second site?

Third site:

--"AMATEUR SLUT LOVER CLICK HERE!!" is blind as hell
--Text/background color combo hurts my eyes, and I won't list a site that hurts my eyes
--"Tons Of Fresh And Young Amateur Slut Movies & Photo Galleries" unacceptable use of the word "young"

docholly · 2006-02-11, 11:18 AM

just from looking at the picture on here.. i thought she was a tranny and that was HER dick she was wanking..

http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp...8/01/main.php?

RawAlex · 2006-02-11, 12:16 PM

I saw this thread title and I wanted to post "your girlfriend is sleeping with your best friend" or something like that...

I agree with Greenguy on these sites... bad grammar is death on porn sites. If the potential customer is laughing more than getting excited, you aren't selling them anything except a good laugh. You might want to get your free sites designed in a non-english country, but you really need to have the text and content checked and corrected by a real english speaker before you try to sell to them (it is the same reason I don't build german sites... my german sucks!).

Alex

2006-02-09, 01:44 PM	#1
SexycityBrian If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 38	Make our designer Cry Ok so our designer was making freesites that suck to we told him to spend a day reading post about how to do them right and told him to look at what others are doing and spend the entire day learning ,now here are his samples from what he learned. http://www.collegegirllane.com/freesites/tgp/rxp134/01/ http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/ http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp/rxp1018/01/ Ok so did he pay attention if not tell him why they suck and see if you can make him cry

2006-02-09, 02:21 PM	#3
spazlabz You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Bluegrass State Posts: 963	Great post SwedGuy thank you Jim __________________

2006-02-09, 02:37 PM	#5
Preacher There's Xanax in my thurible! Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Wherever they screw on my head Posts: 2,441	http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/ I personally wouldn't underline your non-linked text. Just by looking at the page without mousing over anything I have no idea what is a link and what is just sales text. (gallery pages) Maybe it's just me, but "More chicks inside!" is bordering on blind when it's not under a banner or paysite name. As Swedguy said, title is linked on this site too. __________________ NSCash * This Depraved World

2006-02-11, 08:00 AM	#6
Greenguy The Original Greenguy (Est'd 1996) & AVN HOF Member - I Crop Pics For Thumbs In My Sleep Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Blasdell, NY (shithole suburb south of Buffalo) Posts: 41,929	These do look a lot better than the last ones http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp/rxp1018/01/ - - Your designer seems to use a lot of odd color combinations & the red text on the purple background on the warning & gallery pages is a good example - The text in places seems a bit Roman Maroni: "Enjoy Watching Her As She Enjoys Sucking And Pounding This Huge Cock In Her Breast While Waiting For The Cum To Explode In Her Face!!" 1 - too many enjoys 2 - is "she" really pounding the cock in her breast? 3 - the cum is going to explode "in" her face? http://stripperstreet.com/freesites/tgp/rxp233/01/ - - "THIS STRIPPING SLUT IS NASTY AS HELL AND SHE WANTS YOU TO WATCH. HER TAKING OFF HER CLOTHES, SUCKING COCK, EVEN FUCKING!" What's with the period (new sentence) after "watch"? There's more bad grammar on the sites, but I think you get the idea. If these were submitted to me, I'd probably decline them based on the text And, what I'd like to see are the next free sites for each...I know how your designer likes to use the same content over & over & over.... __________________ Promote POV Porn Cash By Building & Submitting Galleries to the Porn Luv Network

2006-02-11, 08:37 AM	#8
spazlabz You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Bluegrass State Posts: 963	Thank YOu Very much Preachers & GreenGuy. I want you guys all to understand that our Gallery guy IS reading this post (and a nice long thread about freesite design that has been posted many times). Thank you very much for the feed back Jim __________________

2006-02-09, 02:08 PM	#2
swedguy Vagabond Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 2,374	I assume that theses will be used as HFS, so I will be harsh http://www.collegegirllane.com/freesites/tgp/rxp134/01/ Index: * Doesn't fit 800x600 * 2 ads, you can up to 3. The top one wouldn't sell water to a lost Eskimo in the middle of the Sahara desert. * Google has enough traffic = drop the exit link Main: * Doesn't fit 800x600 * Title is linked * Ads that doesn't do very much Galleries and pics: * Doesn't fit 800x600 * Title is linked * The pics are HUGE. The ones I looked at were 300-450kB * Same thing here with the ads * Vidcaps * I wouldn't really categorize her as a college chick

2006-02-09, 02:26 PM	#4
SexycityBrian If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 38	Swedguy thanks these are the things we want to know. Brian

2006-02-11, 10:13 AM	#9
Wazza I'm a jaded evil bastard, I wouldn't piss on myself if I was on fire... Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Melbourne, Australia Posts: 808	Thumbs are gigantic - the ones I checked were all 25kb+ __________________ I sale Internet My sites have no traffic and no PR - let's trade - PM me

2006-02-11, 11:13 AM	#10
MadMax "Without evil there can be no good, so it must be good to be evil sometimes" ~ Satan Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Motor City, baby, where carjacking was invented! Now GIMME THOSE SHOES! Posts: 2,385	The first one has some really bad vidcaps in it. Vidcaps don't sell. If your primary content is movies then build sites with movie clips. Same sales text blocks used over and over on all of them...if they didn't click the first time they aren't clicking the second time. Why not link the banner on the main page of the second site? Third site: --"AMATEUR SLUT LOVER CLICK HERE!!" is blind as hell --Text/background color combo hurts my eyes, and I won't list a site that hurts my eyes --"Tons Of Fresh And Young Amateur Slut Movies & Photo Galleries" unacceptable use of the word "young"

2006-02-11, 11:18 AM	#11
docholly Nothing funnier than the ridiculous faces you people make mid-coitus Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Sin-City USA Posts: 4,973	just from looking at the picture on here.. i thought she was a tranny and that was HER dick she was wanking.. http://amateurpkwy.com/freesites/tgp...8/01/main.php? __________________ Support Indie Porn Sites OMGoddess You know you need some Bling!!

2006-02-11, 12:16 PM	#12
RawAlex Took the hint. Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 5,597	I saw this thread title and I wanted to post "your girlfriend is sleeping with your best friend" or something like that... I agree with Greenguy on these sites... bad grammar is death on porn sites. If the potential customer is laughing more than getting excited, you aren't selling them anything except a good laugh. You might want to get your free sites designed in a non-english country, but you really need to have the text and content checked and corrected by a real english speaker before you try to sell to them (it is the same reason I don't build german sites... my german sucks!). Alex