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2005-08-10, 04:32 PM
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Selling porn allows me to stay in a constant state of Bliss - ain't that a trip!
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The writing is a little bland, compared to your usual output - but that is kind of what you are going for.
I think you could bitesize it more - shorter paragraphs, punchier writing, less exposition. Just make sure you put some major snappy bitesize wordbytes at the beginning of each entry, would be my suggestion. |
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