Opinions/Crit on my latest office sex freesite?
 

Hey everyone. This is site number, I believe, 8. I've only had one signup so far, with those 8 sites, so I was wondering if someone could take a look at this latest and give an opinion/crit/suggestion for improvement.

The url is http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/f...view/index.php (and ignore the mature recips... they're just place holders till I can figure out the catagory for this one...)

Oh, and if you're bored, got extra time, wanna help a newbie out, my other 7 are at my mini hub ... in order of date of completion... hopefully there's some progression as I go on.
http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/my-free-sites.php

No pop ups :)

Thanks a whole bunch in advance.....

eksites

Nuthin? 5 days and I got nothing?

Sigh. I suppose I will have to make more of a permanent presence of myself on the boards and offer my uneducated newbie opinion on a more regular basis. Then, perhaps I'll get a lil feedback of my own.

I understand. you got to give some to get some.|goodnight

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You might want to get more "personal" in your sales text towards the surfer. Stuff like "1000's of porn videos" doesn't cut it anymore.

Also black and blue text/links on a dark-grey background isn't a good idea IMO :)

You also could get declined at some LL's for having that sponsor content with the scan lines.

Like Fonz said you might consider being more personal. They've seen the text (sponsor provided?) too many times; i.e. "I've joined a ton of sites but the action here is totally original" something along that line.

or

If you know your surfers you could use something like "Cum watch these office gals get their freak on"


The colors could be better at call to action too. HTH :)

Awesome advice. Exactly what I was looking for. Thanks. :) I'll keep working on the sales text.

I think I'll do a little research today, check out the first couple dozen sites in my next niche on Penisbot or hoes. Not to copy... just to see how they do it, and what looks good. :)

And re: colors could be better on call to action... did you mean the yellow on green? I was trying to stand out but fear I may have erred on the side of butt ugly color combo.