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Old 2008-01-10, 01:27 PM   #8
Toby
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Originally Posted by hashbury View Post
Better, but this one has a bit too much text, surfers will just scan right past those paragraphs. I'd replace each with a single well worded sentence that makes a specific point. Your job is to get the surfer to click through to the site to find out more.

Also, your bottom linked text is still completely passive. No sense of urgency to go visit the site NOW! How 'bout this:
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