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Like MML said, your best piece of text is going to waste. Your upper text lines are much weaker, and should be rewritten.
I suggest moving the banner to the middle or the bottom, and writing more descriptive and exciting text at the top. Maybe describe the action in one of the pictures, You know, like "She squirms to escape, but it is futile, etc etc...".
Your thumbs are fuzzier than is the standard these days.
Bondage surfers are more sophisticated than average. You have to think about your target. Write for the person who is actually going to pull out a credit card and sign up, ignore all other surfers.
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