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Old 2004-04-23, 12:26 PM   #21
doublep
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Hey Kinimod - thanks for posting the link!

I see what you are trying to do there with the text - I would suggest this. first off lose the caps - as Urb pointed out, any other text you want to highlight, weather it be by capping up key phrases are bolding them - the effect is watered down if everything is capped. Keep it lower case and use the caps and bolding in the copy to catch the surfers eye as he scans the page - bear in mind that when someone surfs in to see your pics/movies they are unlikely to stop and read the whole text - so the above is an ideal way to get your message across.

I don't think you have went overboard with the amount of text - but you have stretched the point a bit in your copy describing the content on the vids, and there is no need to repeat keywords over to many times. What you could have done is replaced some of those video descriptions with some more info about the site you are selling - tell the surfer what he is getting... pics vids movies... are they downloadable... how often does it update... etc etc....

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