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I'm going to the backseat of my car with the woman I love, and I won't be back for TEN MINUTES
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 85
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4th attempt
Ok, I thought I would return for some more punishment! Here is my 4th freesite attempt. 2nd all photo freesite. You guys really did not like my last one. Hopefully this one will be better in your eyes. i listened to everyones advice. I am going for a very clean and simple layout. Let me know what you guys think. Thanx ahead of time! ALOHA
http://www.laurensands.com/freesites...le-butt-2.html |
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Eighteen 'til I Die
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Where is the warning page?
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The Original Greenguy (Est'd 1996) & AVN HOF Member - I Crop Pics For Thumbs In My Sleep
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I'm gonna guess that the warning page is http://www.laurensands.com/freesites...bble-butt.html
![]() In the most basic sense, it's fine, but you might want to look into adding more text to the main & gallery pages - there's a lot of dead space on them that could be used to push surfers to the paysite. |
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There's Xanax in my thurible!
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I'd like to see "Lauren Sands" in the text next to the Click Here To Visit Me Now, to let the surfer's know who or what they are visiting. It borders on a blind link without them.
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The Original Greenguy (Est'd 1996) & AVN HOF Member - I Crop Pics For Thumbs In My Sleep
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Now, if it was a Briana Banks site that said Click Here To Visit Me Now I'd giggle as I clicked the decline button ![]() |
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There's Xanax in my thurible!
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That said, if one of my many native Russian submitters had used the same text I would have rejected it. I like what Mr Yum said above, don't give a reviewer a reason to reject, because not everyone will be familiar with Logan, and putting 'my name is Lauren Sands' in the non-linked text next to the click here to visit doesn't seem like that much of a barrier to sales to me, but I'm no sales expert. ![]() |
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I'm going to the backseat of my car with the woman I love, and I won't be back for TEN MINUTES
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 85
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As always , thank you guys! Ok, I guess Im going for a way to clean approach. I agree the design is way to simple too. Ok I know what I ll be up to tonight. Sorry, the warning page is here http://www.laurensands.com/freesites...bble-butt.html
ALOHA GUYS! |
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Arghhhh...submit yer sites ya ruddy swabs!
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Yep, ya did get real clean with that one
![]() I agree with the other comments...punch up your text. Talk about Lauren a bit more...about what makes her so hot...about what her site can offer that surfer to meet his 'needs'. Added: Hell, you know Lauren intimately...run with that knowledge a little on your sites. Let your mind go to your fingers...what about Lauren pushes YOUR buttons ![]() Preacher is right...'Click Here to Visit Me Now' is borderline. Since it's her site...it's a close call, but remember the cardinal rule...don't give reviewers reasons to decline your site ![]() Last edited by MrYum; 2006-03-13 at 09:23 PM.. Reason: Thought of something else to say...duh |
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I'm going to the backseat of my car with the woman I love, and I won't be back for TEN MINUTES
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 85
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great points, im not sure why I am being such a lazy dumb ass, I can really design when it comes to it. So tonight I will make an effort!
ALOHA |
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You can now put whatever you want in this space :)
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I don't know if this helps at all but many times I've mentioned to people that selling things on the internet uses the same basic techniques as mail order marketing. Not just in the uses of text but also in page layout, etc.. Not necessary to reinvent the wheel. If you don't know these methods, there are thousands of books that you can study and transfer the ideas. You can save yourself a lot of time and learn some professional tricks that have already been proven to SELL!
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You can now put whatever you want in this space :)
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http://www.laurensands.com/freesites/analtoys-FS/87.jpg
495 px wide, short 5 pixels, or 55 depending on where you submit. Otherwise, your site is probably good to go, unless I'm missing something ![]() A few snags: Your background and text are both dark. "Holy Grail of XXX Sites" just doesn't do it for me. It's like Dick Johnson calling himself "King of All Media". You're using relative paths for your images "directory/image.jpg" instead of "http:..." or "/directory/image.jpg." Not a big deal, but it could create problems later on. I could be nitpicking.
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I'm going to the backseat of my car with the woman I love, and I won't be back for TEN MINUTES
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 85
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sweet! Ya, I am getting closer but, I have an idea today for a much better freesite design. Lets hope I get time today to manifest it! ALOHA
Thank you guys!! |
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