Will it Fly? I would appreciate feedback

RawAlex · 2005-09-19, 07:56 PM

You lost my attention before the second "paragraph". You might have something interesting to say, but the layout, format, and such kill it before I even get started.

Also, IMHO, a sales pitch should not spend so much time putting down the other side. I had to read a long way to come to even understand that you were offering a product, and not just launching out some blog style verbal spew about RSS being not as S as you want it to be.

Also, your product name is backwards. "RSS No Brainer" isn't how people mentally lineup a product name. "Nobrainer-RSS" is more in keeping with what people want. When you go "RSS No Brainer is the RSS system that makes RSS not look so difficult like other RSS things RSS blah RSS" I am losing your product name in the middle of it all.

Overall, the page does not inspire confidence in me that the product is going to work.

Just my 2 cents worth, plus uncle sugar excise.

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2005-09-19, 07:56 PM	#4
RawAlex Took the hint. Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 5,597	You lost my attention before the second "paragraph". You might have something interesting to say, but the layout, format, and such kill it before I even get started. Also, IMHO, a sales pitch should not spend so much time putting down the other side. I had to read a long way to come to even understand that you were offering a product, and not just launching out some blog style verbal spew about RSS being not as S as you want it to be. Also, your product name is backwards. "RSS No Brainer" isn't how people mentally lineup a product name. "Nobrainer-RSS" is more in keeping with what people want. When you go "RSS No Brainer is the RSS system that makes RSS not look so difficult like other RSS things RSS blah RSS" I am losing your product name in the middle of it all. Overall, the page does not inspire confidence in me that the product is going to work. Just my 2 cents worth, plus uncle sugar excise.