Another first freesite thread - please review

Halfdeck · 2005-09-10, 04:16 PM

Your index.html

You need a site title top of the page, maybe with some graphix to reassure the surfer he's at a site with porn.

I would make the enter link bigger than the exit link.

Separate boring text from your sales pitch. E.g. your terms of use text, which isn't necessary. I'd just not use it or put a small link on the bottom of page. You have copyright text, terms of use text, warning text and by the time a surfers' done reading that he won't bother reading "fashion & glamour" text.

Use small font for text you're not using toward making a sale. If possible, remove them, except the warning text.

"100% ...of 100%" text could be juiced up.

Main.html

You need more text on the page. Get the visitor horny. Talk directly to the visitor (or pretend you're talking to yourself) and establish trust/authority. Talk in detail about what the surfer will find at your site.

Gallery.html

You only have 2 links here. Add another link. Again more text.

Preacher · 2005-09-10, 08:49 PM

Like Halfdeck said I'd definitely make the Enter text larger and add more sales text to the main page. And on the gallery pages, you have text that reads: "Wanna See More Of Shephanie For FREE?" Yeah I do, so tell me how I can. I'd make that a hyperlink, with the name of the site in it, like...

Wanna See More Of Shephanie For FREE? Then click here to visit Calgary Models!!!

But all of this is just sales advise, the site is listable as it is now. IMO.

CalModels · 2005-09-11, 12:22 AM

to all of you.. thanks a bunch for all the help...

OK last time (I hope) and now I've added in a bunch of recip's there... how is it now?

Personally, the recip's look a little wierd, but I'm looking at 800x600 and through remote desktop that too...

Useless · 2005-09-11, 12:44 AM

OK, here's my take on it in its present condition.

You don't need a period at the end of the title. The text link below the title is blind. Tell the surfer (and the reviewer) where he's going if they click the link.

I personally like to see the title on the top of every page, but it's not a rule - just a preference.

Your thumbs are grainy/blurry. Bring them up to 5-7kb each. The dimensions of the full sized pics are all fucked up. They look like they were shot with a panoramic lense. Tall and narrow.

2005-09-10, 04:16 PM	#1
Halfdeck You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: New Haven, CT Posts: 985	Your index.html You need a site title top of the page, maybe with some graphix to reassure the surfer he's at a site with porn. I would make the enter link bigger than the exit link. Separate boring text from your sales pitch. E.g. your terms of use text, which isn't necessary. I'd just not use it or put a small link on the bottom of page. You have copyright text, terms of use text, warning text and by the time a surfers' done reading that he won't bother reading "fashion & glamour" text. Use small font for text you're not using toward making a sale. If possible, remove them, except the warning text. "100% ...of 100%" text could be juiced up. Main.html You need more text on the page. Get the visitor horny. Talk directly to the visitor (or pretend you're talking to yourself) and establish trust/authority. Talk in detail about what the surfer will find at your site. Gallery.html You only have 2 links here. Add another link. Again more text. __________________ Success is going from failure to failure without a loss of enthusiasm.

2005-09-10, 08:49 PM	#2
Preacher There's Xanax in my thurible! Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Wherever they screw on my head Posts: 2,441	Like Halfdeck said I'd definitely make the Enter text larger and add more sales text to the main page. And on the gallery pages, you have text that reads: "Wanna See More Of Shephanie For FREE?" Yeah I do, so tell me how I can. I'd make that a hyperlink, with the name of the site in it, like... Wanna See More Of Shephanie For FREE? Then click here to visit Calgary Models!!! But all of this is just sales advise, the site is listable as it is now. IMO. __________________ NSCash * This Depraved World

2005-09-11, 12:44 AM	#4
Useless Certified Nice Person Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Dirty Undies, NY Posts: 11,268	OK, here's my take on it in its present condition. You don't need a period at the end of the title. The text link below the title is blind. Tell the surfer (and the reviewer) where he's going if they click the link. I personally like to see the title on the top of every page, but it's not a rule - just a preference. Your thumbs are grainy/blurry. Bring them up to 5-7kb each. The dimensions of the full sized pics are all fucked up. They look like they were shot with a panoramic lense. Tall and narrow. __________________ Click here to purchase a bridge I'm selling.

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2005-09-11, 12:22 AM	#3
CalModels Trying is the first step towards failure Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 122	to all of you.. thanks a bunch for all the help... OK last time (I hope) and now I've added in a bunch of recip's there... how is it now? Personally, the recip's look a little wierd, but I'm looking at 800x600 and through remote desktop that too...