Hi Green, what's the problem with my sites

[SmithsMedia]

Ive submitted to you also GG I think I meet your rules though since reading this thread Im guessing I need to change fast :-)

Ive started to try and adopt a more commercial approach -

http://www.smithsfeet.co.uk/index2.htm

After reading a lot of threads and trying to find a good process I finally found one and also have started to realise I supposed to be tempting people to join my sponsors. not giving content away but Im still a mile off being a polished off free site builder.

Any how my question is will this type of build pass your selection process GG?