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Licker4U · 2007-06-13, 04:54 PM

[quote=guti;351882]Teeny_Love_It_Deeply

On the index page: Quite a few grammatical errors. "Cum inside and feel those anus for yourself" should be "Cum inside and feel this anus for yourself"

"This brown beauties just love a cock in their anus..." should be "These brown beauties..."

"myslef" should be "myself"

"They are using their anus like a pumping machine to take out that semen away" the plural for "anus" is "anuses" which sounds weird. Might say "they are using their butt holes...." Also, "to take out that semen away" Not sure on this one but it just doesn't sound right. Maybe "to take that semen away" or "to drain those cocks".

Also, any word after a period (.) needs to start with a capital letter.

Personally I wouldn't have an exit link to Google but that's just me.

Main page "Cum inside and feel those anus for yourself" should be "Cum inside and feel this anus for yourself"

I would put some text above and below the banners. Get the surfer excited. Tell him what he can get, how much there is to see, how easy it is to join, how it's better than any other anal site, and then tell him what to do. "Click Here For The Free Tour At Supreme Anal!" "Get The Three Day Trial For Only $1.00!" "Join The Anal Girls At Supreme Anal!" "Join Supreme Anal And Start Downloading in Seconds! Click Here Now!"
Something telling him what to do.

Galleries. I wouldn't put a link to gallery 2 on gallery 1. Surfer clicks back to the main page to get the link for gallery 2 he looks at your ads again. Again, more text above and below the banners. Or remove some banners and just use text. Text sells better than banners anyway. I use banners to add color to a page and to act as a divider seperating areas of the page.

Nice start, keep tweaking it!

2007-06-13, 04:54 PM	#11
Licker4U Mean people suck, nice people swallow, are you mean or nice? Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Lower Alabama-The Redneck Riviera Posts: 2,377	[quote=guti;351882]Teeny_Love_It_Deeply On the index page: Quite a few grammatical errors. "Cum inside and feel those anus for yourself" should be "Cum inside and feel this anus for yourself" "This brown beauties just love a cock in their anus..." should be "These brown beauties..." "myslef" should be "myself" "They are using their anus like a pumping machine to take out that semen away" the plural for "anus" is "anuses" which sounds weird. Might say "they are using their butt holes...." Also, "to take out that semen away" Not sure on this one but it just doesn't sound right. Maybe "to take that semen away" or "to drain those cocks". Also, any word after a period (.) needs to start with a capital letter. Personally I wouldn't have an exit link to Google but that's just me. Main page "Cum inside and feel those anus for yourself" should be "Cum inside and feel this anus for yourself" I would put some text above and below the banners. Get the surfer excited. Tell him what he can get, how much there is to see, how easy it is to join, how it's better than any other anal site, and then tell him what to do. "Click Here For The Free Tour At Supreme Anal!" "Get The Three Day Trial For Only $1.00!" "Join The Anal Girls At Supreme Anal!" "Join Supreme Anal And Start Downloading in Seconds! Click Here Now!" Something telling him what to do. Galleries. I wouldn't put a link to gallery 2 on gallery 1. Surfer clicks back to the main page to get the link for gallery 2 he looks at your ads again. Again, more text above and below the banners. Or remove some banners and just use text. Text sells better than banners anyway. I use banners to add color to a page and to act as a divider seperating areas of the page. Nice start, keep tweaking it!