Critique My New Blog

[kristian]

Overall, I like it and I know - you being you - you'll make it a successful site.

I would suggest you change only two elements : the tone of your writer's voice and the overall design.

Your tone needs to be more lively. In acting terminology I'd consider it slightly wooden. You need to write in a professional manner, in keeping with the attitude of disseminating sexy and pornographic information, but add conversational nuances. I would think of it like writing for HMV, Empire, Loaded. Consider your audience. Predominantly guys who like beer, breasts, boats, butts and, hell, anything else laddish. You're text book right now; you need to be Empire.

The design should be first rate and not generic. It should convince readers that the information is worthy of their time. A good design will enhance your more professional approach, make your site stand out from the other 80,000 blogs created today, and actually make readers listen more to what you have to say. Go with a different template and get a logo design or get someone to toally skin it to spec.

Aside from the elements I would change, I do like the overal idea, and you can obviously write in a professional manner.

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