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Old 2006-10-12, 07:11 PM   #1
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Review please :)

Hello and welcome

I'm new here, and i've just make my first freesite just for your comments So tell me please what is wrong, what should i add or what should i delete. Don't take care about domain It's for-comment-hosted now

And a freesite is HERE
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Old 2006-10-12, 07:24 PM   #2
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|shocking| That text add on your second page is bad enough to get you banned everywhere!

Just don't market with the word 'young' and you'll be better off. What your text infers is beyond the pale though. Yank it or you'll get no love from anyone!
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Old 2006-10-12, 07:28 PM   #3
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Thanks for advice. 'Young' word deleted from adtext.
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Old 2006-10-12, 08:13 PM   #4
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i like it very nice for your first, my first looked like crap.
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Old 2006-10-12, 09:32 PM   #5
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Arrival , Good work

You can and link back to your main.html on your gallery pages (gallery1.html and gallery2.html) for example "BACK TO MAIN SITE"

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Old 2006-10-12, 09:49 PM   #6
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Looks pretty damn good for a first effort to me.
The enter on your banner on the index might be a problem with some Link Lists, but that will vary.
All in all a damn nice first effort though. I'll be watching my submits for it.
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Old 2006-10-12, 10:12 PM   #7
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Ok guys...I know perhaps I'm a bit more strict about some things than others...

But, am I the ONLY one that has a problem with...
"Sch**lgirls First Time"???

Or, better still...
"Y*ung Teen Vlrgins"???

No offense intended Arrival...I know you're new. But I wouldn't touch that site with a 10 foot pole
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Old 2006-10-12, 10:20 PM   #8
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Ok guys...I know perhaps I'm a bit more strict about some things than others...

But, am I the ONLY one that has a problem with...
"Sch**lgirls First Time"???

Or, better still...
"Y*ung Teen Vlrgins"???

No offense intended Arrival...I know you're new. But I wouldn't touch that site with a 10 foot pole
nope, you're not the only one. There's a couple of paysites like that I won't take on freesites. Just makes me uncomfortable.
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Old 2006-10-12, 11:03 PM   #9
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Ok guys...I know perhaps I'm a bit more strict about some things than others...

But, am I the ONLY one that has a problem with...
"Sch**lgirls First Time"???

Or, better still...
"Y*ung Teen Vlrgins"???

No offense intended Arrival...I know you're new. But I wouldn't touch that site with a 10 foot pole
I'm not in review mode at the moment but you are not alone. Anything that closely relates or infers to something that is not legal gets an instant decline.

Arrival,
I think you will probably see most of your sales coming from the North American, Uk and AU market. In the United States a price is listed as $1.95 not 1,95$.

I don't think it will get you declined at most places but you did not declare a document type. Reviewers use different browsers and by not declaring a doc type you increase the risk of the site looking other than what you intended.

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Old 2006-10-12, 11:27 PM   #10
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Ok guys...I know perhaps I'm a bit more strict about some things than others...

But, am I the ONLY one that has a problem with...
"Sch**lgirls First Time"???

Or, better still...
"Y*ung Teen Vlrgins"???

No offense intended Arrival...I know you're new. But I wouldn't touch that site with a 10 foot pole
hmmmmm. I assumed the y**ng part had been covered, and didn't have a problem with the sch**lgirls part initially. But, after further review and a clickthru to the sponsor, I'm in total agreement MrYum.
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Old 2006-10-13, 12:23 AM   #11
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Good...glad I'm not all alone on the island

Yea, some paysites just push the boundaries too damn far...and that particular site would be a case in point

Arrival...again, I understand you're new so perhaps you just don't understand. Any site that pushes the envelope of age or consent is walking a very fine line that you probably don't want to walk. The text on those banners is way too close to the edge in my opinion.

That said, now that I've thrashed you over your choice of paysites...let's see if I can offer something constructive about your site

Adding to Majors comments...

Index page...
The paysite links on your site open new windows...that's an instant decline with most reviewers. You're not allowed to open any new windows on free sites. The only exception to this rule is your 2257 link...and even that is a toss up with some reviewers.

The rows/columns of letters...I'm assuming that's a holding space for recips. If so, that looks like a whole lot of recips. I'd suggest you keep it down to no more than 12 recips on the page to start out. Once you get more fluent in free sites, you can probably bump that number up a bit by using custom recips...but that's for later

Main page...
I don't see any technical problems here.

Galleries...
Technically, the galleries look okay too.

A couple things...I'm not going to comment on your text usage because some of it ties in with the paysite theme. I would however suggest that you brush up a bit on your english skills...as even the name of your site doesn't really make sense.

Also, as you're brushing up on those english skills...don't be afraid to put some juicy text on your pages. Get the surfer warmed up a bit...push his buttons...make him want to check out the sponsor site
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Old 2006-10-13, 03:01 AM   #12
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MrYum: Thank's for all advices!

Now i know that first thing that i should do is volume my english skills and find another teen site to promote without any young-age-related promo banners.

Back to my test freesite
Paysite links are ok now - it was code pasted from sponsor page.

There is place for 16 recips but if it'll be better i can delete 4 of them

Doctype added

Text in my site is now copied from paysite because as you know i must still learn alot about juicy writing

Thank's again for all tips - i'll write when i pick another site to promote and correct freesite title
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Old 2006-10-13, 06:49 AM   #13
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Check it again please - http://gustowna.pl/freesajt/
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Old 2006-10-13, 07:25 AM   #14
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looks good, submit it and see what happens would be my next move
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Old 2006-10-13, 08:01 AM   #15
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What about ad size? Aren't they too big?
And tits on the warning page ad are ok with terms? Hardcore is not allowed but what about 2 little tits?
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Old 2006-10-13, 10:56 AM   #16
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tits are ok and I would be ok with the ad size, can't talk for the other LL's about ad size, but I am pretty sure nobody minds tits on the warning page
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Old 2006-10-13, 04:35 PM   #17
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What about ad size? Aren't they too big?
And tits on the warning page ad are ok with terms? Hardcore is not allowed but what about 2 little tits?
That site looks much better

The full page ad on the main page may create problems with some reviewers...as some sites specifically disallow fpas. But, since you do have one of your gallery links above the fpa...you'd probably be ok with most reviewers. Definitely read the rules of each link site to see if they don't want any fpas period.

Don't think the boobs on the entry page will cause any problems at all. Hardcore is generally defined as penetration of any kind and/or cumshots.
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Old 2006-10-15, 02:34 PM   #18
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The gallaries look good.
but personally i would add a bit more gallaries to it.
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Old 2006-10-15, 05:32 PM   #19
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From the previous comments I am guessing a lot has already been changed. I like the layout and look of the site, much better than most I see. Dont know why Borged is saying add more galleries, you want to tease the surfer and only give way what you have to to get listed. You of course want them to go to the sponsor and sign-up, not get their jollies off on your galleries and your out.

And, as your probably alrey know, you need more ads and better ads and as Mr Yum and others have said, you need selling text.. But I like how it looks so far.

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Old 2006-10-16, 05:25 PM   #20
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So the main problem is selling text I think i must find a person who will do this for me for $$$ because my english skills are in middle low level
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