Are my blog descriptions rubbish?

[walrus]

Originally Posted by marcjacob

BTW id love to say that im better at Gay but i think that needs spicing up too. I guess the nuances advices is where im trying to head but not really getting it? Is that what makes the sales?

Personally, I try to paint a fantasy with words which entices the surfer to click further.

But then again, I prefer the soft sell. I look at like I'm doing the pre-sales work and then turn it over to the sponsors tour for the hard sell.