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Originally Posted by tbkhor
I have checked with online spelling and grammar checker and Microsoft Word, I found these errors:
change to -
we shove cocks so far down their throats!
change to -
this site still offers $1 trial for three days
Please let me know if it is ok now.......
thank you
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Here, let me try and help. Not a native speaker here myself, but I could see a few problems there -
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Are you looking for blowjob movie? You get it! You will find throat ramming, deep throat cum shots, fish hooking, rough action, gagging here. Do not wait, while this site still offer $1 trial for three days. Too good to be true?
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Are you looking for blowjob movies? You got it! You will find throat ramming, deep throat cum shots, fish hooking, rough action, gagging here. Do not wait, while this site still offers $1 trial for three days. Too good to be true?
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Personally, I would change the wording some more, but I just highlighted the actual grammatical issues. You may want to change "do not" into "don't" too, to make it flow better. Also, I would lose the "too good to be true?" - why make them think it might be some scam?