Opinions/Crit on my latest office sex freesite?

eksites · 2004-10-01, 03:21 PM

Hey everyone. This is site number, I believe, 8. I've only had one signup so far, with those 8 sites, so I was wondering if someone could take a look at this latest and give an opinion/crit/suggestion for improvement.

The url is http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/f...view/index.php (and ignore the mature recips... they're just place holders till I can figure out the catagory for this one...)

Oh, and if you're bored, got extra time, wanna help a newbie out, my other 7 are at my mini hub ... in order of date of completion... hopefully there's some progression as I go on.
http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/my-free-sites.php

No pop ups

Thanks a whole bunch in advance.....

eksites

eksites · 2004-10-05, 04:15 AM

Nuthin? 5 days and I got nothing?

Sigh. I suppose I will have to make more of a permanent presence of myself on the boards and offer my uneducated newbie opinion on a more regular basis. Then, perhaps I'll get a lil feedback of my own.

I understand. you got to give some to get some.|goodnight

Fonz · 2004-10-05, 04:28 AM

You might want to get more "personal" in your sales text towards the surfer. Stuff like "1000's of porn videos" doesn't cut it anymore.

Also black and blue text/links on a dark-grey background isn't a good idea IMO

You also could get declined at some LL's for having that sponsor content with the scan lines.

Surfn · 2004-10-05, 04:41 AM

Like Fonz said you might consider being more personal. They've seen the text (sponsor provided?) too many times; i.e. "I've joined a ton of sites but the action here is totally original" something along that line.

or

If you know your surfers you could use something like "Cum watch these office gals get their freak on"

The colors could be better at call to action too. HTH

eksites · 2004-10-05, 01:36 PM

Awesome advice. Exactly what I was looking for. Thanks.

I'll keep working on the sales text.

I think I'll do a little research today, check out the first couple dozen sites in my next niche on Penisbot or hoes. Not to copy... just to see how they do it, and what looks good.

And re: colors could be better on call to action... did you mean the yellow on green? I was trying to stand out but fear I may have erred on the side of butt ugly color combo.

2004-10-01, 03:21 PM	#1
eksites Heh Heh Heh! Lisa! Vampires are make believe, just like elves and gremlins and eskimos! Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 73	Opinions/Crit on my latest office sex freesite? Hey everyone. This is site number, I believe, 8. I've only had one signup so far, with those 8 sites, so I was wondering if someone could take a look at this latest and give an opinion/crit/suggestion for improvement. The url is http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/f...view/index.php (and ignore the mature recips... they're just place holders till I can figure out the catagory for this one...) Oh, and if you're bored, got extra time, wanna help a newbie out, my other 7 are at my mini hub ... in order of date of completion... hopefully there's some progression as I go on. http://www.causefuckemthatswhy.com/my-free-sites.php No pop ups Thanks a whole bunch in advance..... eksites

2004-10-05, 04:28 AM	#3
Fonz Former pr0n slinger. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Antwerp, Belgium Posts: 7,932	You might want to get more "personal" in your sales text towards the surfer. Stuff like "1000's of porn videos" doesn't cut it anymore. Also black and blue text/links on a dark-grey background isn't a good idea IMO You also could get declined at some LL's for having that sponsor content with the scan lines. __________________ See how I abuse little trees on my Shumi no Bonsai Blog

2004-10-05, 04:41 AM	#4
Surfn If you don’t take a chance the Angels won’t dance Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Earth on occasion Posts: 8,812	Like Fonz said you might consider being more personal. They've seen the text (sponsor provided?) too many times; i.e. "I've joined a ton of sites but the action here is totally original" something along that line. or If you know your surfers you could use something like "Cum watch these office gals get their freak on" The colors could be better at call to action too. HTH __________________ Surfn's Links Are you a partner?

2004-10-05, 04:15 AM	#2
eksites Heh Heh Heh! Lisa! Vampires are make believe, just like elves and gremlins and eskimos! Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 73	Nuthin? 5 days and I got nothing? Sigh. I suppose I will have to make more of a permanent presence of myself on the boards and offer my uneducated newbie opinion on a more regular basis. Then, perhaps I'll get a lil feedback of my own. I understand. you got to give some to get some.\|goodnight

2004-10-05, 01:36 PM	#5
eksites Heh Heh Heh! Lisa! Vampires are make believe, just like elves and gremlins and eskimos! Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 73	Awesome advice. Exactly what I was looking for. Thanks. I'll keep working on the sales text. I think I'll do a little research today, check out the first couple dozen sites in my next niche on Penisbot or hoes. Not to copy... just to see how they do it, and what looks good. And re: colors could be better on call to action... did you mean the yellow on green? I was trying to stand out but fear I may have erred on the side of butt ugly color combo.