Someone can help me with grammar?

jgaraza · 2007-08-12, 01:30 PM

this are my two sentence i want to correct:
"Sweet Teenie Before Bed Cock",
"This Oz Dorothy doesn't have magic shoes, but she sucks so hardly
her boyfriend's cock wishing that
he'll fuck her Ass.

Come in!!!
and see if she get what she clame."

if you ask i´m from Uruguay my natal language is spanish i study english yes but it was 7 years ago and grammar is one thing i don´t remember
and if you have this question in your mind i don´t work with spanish sponsors because they not pay what they say and don´t have real and high quality porn to promote in other words they buy content to english sponsors and old ones jajajaja

i hope you understand
thanks again

Lemmy · 2007-08-12, 02:34 PM

I'm not trying to be mean here, but it can't be corrected because it's meaningless to begin with.

If your English is very limited I would advise you to keep it as simple as possible. Forget about Dorothy and Oz references (meaningless) and get straight to the point in as few words as possible.

jgaraza · 2007-08-12, 03:01 PM

thanks Lemmy but i really like that sentence i think it´s like this this Oz`s Dorothy right?

Lemmy · 2007-08-12, 04:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jgaraza

thanks Lemmy but i really like that sentence i think it´s like this this Oz`s Dorothy right?

Well if you like it, keep it, but be prepared to have your site rejected. I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. The "meaningless" judgement stands.

Tekster · 2007-08-12, 06:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lemmy

Well if you like it, keep it, but be prepared to have your site rejected. I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. The "meaningless" judgement stands.

Totally agree with Lemmy here. It is meaningless.

LD · 2007-08-13, 02:35 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lemmy

I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. .

Damn shame, too.

secretagentwilly · 2007-08-12, 06:54 PM

Here's a stab at it:

"Sweet Teenie take a big cock. Dorothy's not in Oz no more and she doesn't have her magic shoes. She sucks and fucks hoping to get back home. She does it all, she even gets her ass fucked. Come in and see if she earns her way home."

good luck...

Useless · 2007-08-13, 12:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by easymama

Here's a stab at it:

"Sweet Teenie take a big cock. Dorothy's not in Oz no more and she doesn't have her magic shoes. She sucks and fucks hoping to get back home. She does it all, she even gets her ass fucked. Come in and see if she earns her way home."

That's not much better.

jgaraza, unless you intend on coming here and having the board rewrite your text for each site you build, you are going to have copy it from your sponsor. Of course, the sponsors tend not be the brightest bulbs in the box either. So their text may be deficient in the same manner as yours.

Also, don't use characters from children's movies on porn sites. I don't care how well written that text is or isn't. I'd reject it for the Oz references.

LowryBigwood · 2007-08-13, 12:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Useless Warrior

Also, don't use characters from children's movies on porn sites. I don't care how well written that text is or isn't. I'd reject it for the Oz references.

Exactly right Useless. Jgar, how many people searching for the wizard of oz terms want to land on a porn page? I am betting a big fat ZERO. You are not going to get listed at very many places at all with that crap.

jgaraza · 2007-08-12, 06:56 PM

well thanks for the tip i didn´t know that you are so stricts sorry i made a mistake and i just correct it

thanks again

johnnybg · 2007-08-13, 09:17 AM

You can always copy some sales text right off the site you wish to promote. It's not the best way (actually it's not very good at all) but it's a start. Some sponsors even give you pre-made text links which you can use on your sites.

Go to some English classes, invest in yourself. It will be useful anyway, not only for adult webmastering.

jgaraza · 2007-08-13, 02:54 PM

ok thanks all i understand know that in fact i understand that in message number 4 from Lenny
now i know what can i write and what not
thanks again
bye =O)

Greenguy · 2007-08-13, 03:16 PM

Lenny

Lemmy · 2007-08-13, 03:29 PM

Who the fuck is Lenny?

Useless · 2007-08-13, 06:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lemmy

Who the fuck is Lenny?

That would make a great domain name.

jgaraza · 2007-08-13, 05:17 PM

sorry it´s Lemmy not Lenny
my mistake

Den · 2007-08-13, 07:56 PM

very common mistake - hardly is used to suggest that sth is unlikely or unreasonable. hard is already an adjective.

HarryM · 2007-08-14, 05:30 AM

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2007-08-12, 01:30 PM	#1
jgaraza If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Montevideo - Uruguay Posts: 30	Someone can help me with grammar? this are my two sentence i want to correct: "Sweet Teenie Before Bed Cock", "This Oz Dorothy doesn't have magic shoes, but she sucks so hardly her boyfriend's cock wishing that he'll fuck her Ass. Come in!!! and see if she get what she clame." if you ask i´m from Uruguay my natal language is spanish i study english yes but it was 7 years ago and grammar is one thing i don´t remember and if you have this question in your mind i don´t work with spanish sponsors because they not pay what they say and don´t have real and high quality porn to promote in other words they buy content to english sponsors and old ones jajajaja i hope you understand thanks again __________________ May the Schwartz be with you!!!

2007-08-12, 02:34 PM	#2
Lemmy You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Next door to a kid with a moped. Posts: 1,492	I'm not trying to be mean here, but it can't be corrected because it's meaningless to begin with. If your English is very limited I would advise you to keep it as simple as possible. Forget about Dorothy and Oz references (meaningless) and get straight to the point in as few words as possible. __________________ BUY MY PORNSITES!

2007-08-12, 03:01 PM	#3
jgaraza If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Montevideo - Uruguay Posts: 30	thanks Lemmy but i really like that sentence i think it´s like this this Oz`s Dorothy right? __________________ May the Schwartz be with you!!!

2007-08-12, 06:54 PM	#7
secretagentwilly You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Los Angeles, California Posts: 637	Here's a stab at it: "Sweet Teenie take a big cock. Dorothy's not in Oz no more and she doesn't have her magic shoes. She sucks and fucks hoping to get back home. She does it all, she even gets her ass fucked. Come in and see if she earns her way home." good luck... __________________ HandRodeo.com - The Best Adult Sex Cam Reviews - JoyToy.us

2007-08-12, 06:56 PM	#10
jgaraza If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Montevideo - Uruguay Posts: 30	well thanks for the tip i didn´t know that you are so stricts sorry i made a mistake and i just correct it thanks again __________________ May the Schwartz be with you!!!

2007-08-13, 09:17 AM	#11
johnnybg I want to set the record straight - I thought the cop was a prostitute Join Date: May 2004 Location: Serbia & Montenegro Posts: 292	You can always copy some sales text right off the site you wish to promote. It's not the best way (actually it's not very good at all) but it's a start. Some sponsors even give you pre-made text links which you can use on your sites. Go to some English classes, invest in yourself. It will be useful anyway, not only for adult webmastering. __________________ Teen Porn Site Blog Johnny's Porn Nesa (aka johnnybg)

2007-08-13, 02:54 PM	#12
jgaraza If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Montevideo - Uruguay Posts: 30	ok thanks all i understand know that in fact i understand that in message number 4 from Lenny now i know what can i write and what not thanks again bye =O) __________________ May the Schwartz be with you!!!

2007-08-13, 03:16 PM	#13
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2007-08-13, 03:29 PM	#14
Lemmy You can now put whatever you want in this space :) Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Next door to a kid with a moped. Posts: 1,492	Who the fuck is Lenny? __________________ BUY MY PORNSITES!

2007-08-13, 05:17 PM	#16
jgaraza If something goes wrong at the plant, blame the guy who can't speak English Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Montevideo - Uruguay Posts: 30	sorry it´s Lemmy not Lenny my mistake __________________ May the Schwartz be with you!!! Last edited by jgaraza; 2007-08-13 at 05:20 PM..

2007-08-13, 07:56 PM	#17
Den WHO IS FONZY!?! Don't they teach you anything at school? Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: DE Posts: 49	very common mistake - hardly is used to suggest that sth is unlikely or unreasonable. hard is already an adjective. __________________ Clean hentai trades wanted! Hentai Prince

2007-08-14, 05:30 AM	#18
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